Friday, February 5, 2010

Alyssa Friedel: RA Intro and Body Paragraph

We hear the word “Globalization” numerous times in the news and from politicians, but what does this word mean? In the dictionary it says, “Globalization means to extend to other or all parts of the globe; make worldwide.” There are many areas of our world that can be affected positively as well as negative by globalization. One specific area could be food trade, and how globalization can hurt local businesses. In our economy, it is hard for small businesses or farmers to stay in business, and most end up being bought out by bigger, more global companies. In the article, “Going Local on a Global Scale: Rethinking Food Trade in the Era of Climate Change, Dumping, and Rural Poverty” by Kirsten Schwind, succeeds in persuading its audience to rethink trade and increase local food production by bringing up issues such as climate change, dumping and poverty that our affected by trade, discusses current examples of unneeded trade, uses literary devices such as tone, word choice and imagery, and makes a call to action to the audience.

In economics the theory of comparative advantage is used, which means each region should specialize in producing only what it can produce most cheaply and then trade with other regions for everything else. This theory makes sense but Kirsten Schwind points out the fact that it should be reexamined and look at its harmful effects. She points out the fact that, “Impacts of climate change mean that environmental cost of transporting goods long distances are much higher than previously thought” (Schwind). There is much discussion in our world about global warming and what is causing it. This is a hot topic in politics and the way she mentions how trade could be a cause to global warming makes her argument strong. If our climate continues to change, “raising sea temperatures, and flooding coastal areas, it can increase crop failure.” Schwind makes these profound statements to show the seriousness of how trade affects our climate. Not only does trade hurt our climate but it does not help those countries who are developing, trying to establish their own government and economy.

3 comments:

  1. It looks like you have a lot of evidence ready to write about! I feel that your thesis is rather long and has lots of divisions, which I might change, but if you feel you can prove all of them, go for it! In your intro you say positively and negative in like the third sentence, and I think you meant negatively. One last suggestion, you say "one specific area could be food trade," I'd change that to "one specific area is food trade" as that is what you're addressing for the rest of your paper. Good luck!

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  2. Good use of quotations and making your points clear but we you cite your sources a little more correct. Very readable and easy to understand. A few punctuation errors, which is fine they can always be fixed. Good first paragraph argument.

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  3. I think that quoting from the dictionary is too Sacrament Meeting 101 and not really necessary. There's probably another way to transition globalization to your specific topic. First body paragraph is really good, but the connection to the thesis could be clearer.

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